Friday, November 4, 2011

Ice Cream Comets

Filled with joy and excitement, room 13 made Ice cream comets in our bay. “Yummy” I said. As most kids had a wild excitement they were crazy and demanding for more. I knew this was going to be a big treat.

Eagerly awaiting for the delectable treat one of the teachers poured Ice cream on our hand.
Mixing it with biscuits and sprinkles it turned out good. As our stomachs were impatient we begged to eat it. We rolled it like play dough. It began to melt on my fingers.

As whaea Janille put a cone on top we scoped up the ice cream on our cones we slurped.
sweet ice cream dripped in my hand as it created a large mess. It made my stomach sore.
Crunch crunch I heard as some of our class devoured it.

What a afternoon to enjoy It left me begging for more.That was yummy and I wish that we could do it again.


  1. Hell Rocky! You have written a great piece! The descriptive words you chose to use are wonderful. I especially liked the way you used the words delectable, crunch and devoured. Very well done.

  2. Malo and kiora Rocky,

    I see you have improved more from the start of the year. You started off with small paragraphs and now you have improved. I am so proud. You have used cool sentence beginnings as well as putting punctuation in the right place. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see more.

    God bless, Love shalom.


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